Of all the global environmental problems, desertification is, perhaps, the most threatening for poor rural people. Desertification is the expansion of desert lands into previously non-desert areas. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem?

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The phenomenon of desertification has aroused wide concern among all the universal environmental issues, especially bringing threats to those poor communities living in rural areas, when their living place has transformed from a non-desolate field to an arid district. The cause of the fertile soil turning into a desolate field includes overplanting of the land. The dust in these regions is generally less humid and
hence
not as healthy as the other lands, which will
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more difficult to grow those crops that are popular in the market. To push up the sales and revenue, the farmers shall plant the fast-growing botanic, making the farm become weaker. Another cause bringing the situation is the lack of
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for infrastructure provided in these remote districts,
such
as the water storing structure and the watering system is seldom been seen in the desert. In view of
this
alarming situation of desertification, the law and local society have the duty to overcome
this
problem. There are several actions that the politicians and the local community can take to solve the problem described above. First of all, the authority can increase the expenditure on the development of a watering system or
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storing scheme in order to lessen the expansion of the desert lands,
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, by building a pipe to pull in the rain from the edge of the urban range into the rural region, or to introduce some inventions that can make use of the weather of the arid to generate drink - There was a system that introduced in north-west China to make use of the extreme temperature differences in day and night, to knit a net to capture the dew at the dawn and collect in a rain tank.
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, the local people can protect the green lands by keeping the land fertile, spreading out the farming area and taking turns
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using different parts of the land to grow crops, giving the soil to rest for the next harvest.
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more and more people in
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areas are suffering from the problems related to desertification, there are solutions that the government and local folk can be taken to alleviate the problem and it is hoped that the situation will be solved in the near future.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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