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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking, dressing.... should not be taught. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #exams #skills
It is often argued
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what kind of education should be given to students.
Although
 the benefits of the lessons like math, literature or biology are easily seen sometimes people tend to ignore the impact of learning everyday
life
skills
such
 as cooking or dressing.
This
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detailed
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 analysis to readers. Schools must provide good academic lessons like math, history or physics but the aim of
this
 goal should not be passing the
exam
 or
get
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 an A+ on their
exam
 result which won’t be useful in real
life
. The purpose should be
teach
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to
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them to
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 think rationally or be more precise with their past or be aware of how nature works.
However
 using
exam
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exams
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 could be useful to help kids to learn because
without
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 any force, they won’t be motivated to learn
this hard topics
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such
 as algebra or the laws of Newton.
In
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 the other hand, a lot of successful people reached their
goal
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 because of their soft
skills
 not because
of
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they were good at getting
perfect
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a perfect
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score
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 on every
exam
. School
also
 must be a place to gain the abilities from easy tasks, it might
be seem
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 not useful at the beginning
however
these kind
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this kind
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 of chores have the potential to teach something. One clear example is that while doing the laundry,
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a person
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person
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people
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 learn how to organise and become better with their time
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management
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managements
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management
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skills
. In conclusion, children spend most of their time in classes,
listening
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 the teacher which plays an important role in their
life
 but another option could
be take
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 them to
outside
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the outside
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 of the classroom and help them to gain soft
skills
 which
is
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 harder to ignore the benefits in both daily and business
life
.
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