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In the future, nobady wii by printed newspapers or books because they will be ableto read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobady #wii #newspapers #books #ableto
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 debated topic among topic
people
 that printed
materials
such
 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
book
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books
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 will be replaced by online
information
 as
the
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free
access
of
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 online resources.
Although
 I believe
people
 will be more willing to use online
information
, I will argue that publications will remain popular for some
people
. On the one hand, printed
materials
 will be used by
special
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 generation of
people
. Take old
people
 as a salient example.
In other words
, printed material
such
 as
book
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books
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 or
newspaper
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newspapers
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more
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 published
every
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in every
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 corner of
world
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the world
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 and
people
 had comfortable
access
 to these resources
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 in shipping long-
last
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habit
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habits
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 for them.
Therefore
, they find it difficult to change the
way
off
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accessing
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to
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apply
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the
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information
such
 as
using
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by using
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 E-books.
Secondly
,
as
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 a social
perspective
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 the
information
of
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in
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 printed
materials
 can be better censored. Since most of the websites are open for
people
 to post their comments
this
 trend brings a chaotic influx of online
information
 which is not
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favourite
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 for some
people
.
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, these
type
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types
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 of
materials
 will remain interesting for
certain
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a certain
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generation
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generations
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 of society.
On the other hand
, it is undisputable fact that the internet has revolutionized the
way
 we can
access
to
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apply
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information
. It means that it put almost all
information
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of
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 the world at our fingertips without paying money for them. In
fact
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people
 used to search many shelves of the library to find
theire
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their
 required
information
 for conducting
a
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research or finding their favourite book, whereas online
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resources
resourses
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resources
 will
paves
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 the
way
 for them to find their
materials
 in an easy
way
.
Moreover
,
people
 have
access
 to online resources everywhere they want, reading them
on
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at
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 their prefered time. These reasons vividly elaborate
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materials
 would become more popular among
people
 in the future. By
way
 of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that, while
people
 will be more interested in using online
materials
such
 as
E-book
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e-books
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,
publication
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the publication
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 will remain popular for older
people
 to some
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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