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The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the Internet? What solutions can you suggest?

#internet
A new era started with the innovation of
internet
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,
now a days
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nowadays
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 is a necessity to have a computer or a cellphone in
the
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 hands, if someone needs to make an investigation,
an
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 essay, they don't need to go to the library, there are not need to go out of their houses, an easier way now, you have to
use
 your smartphone, open the
internet
 application, put in the Google search whatever you want to find, is so amazing because you can find books,
another
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 works about the theme that you are doing the investigation, another sources that help you to do a better work, for a way is a good tool for
people
, that made a little bit easy their work. That advance helped
to
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scientists to make an important
innovation
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innovations
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, in all
kind
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 of areas, medicine, technology,
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and discovering
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discovering
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. And not just for that,
internet
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 allows some
people
 to be in communication with their relatives when they are so far
of
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 home. In the
last
days
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 is using
for
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activists to find help for some situations, donations, made publicity for
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the campaign
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campaign
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campaigns
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 for
people
 that need. But
in
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 the other hand, exist
people
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 which don't give the correct
use
 to
internet
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, if well is an important tool,
can
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which can
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 be a
a
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distraction, Or
use
this
 application for bad,
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include
incluide
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including
try
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 to steal money through
the
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bank accounts
in
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internet
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. It made a better society, but there
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are
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ara
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are
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 some exceptions
,
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 is the choice of
people
 how to
use
 it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • instantaneous communication
  • social media platforms
  • virtual meetings
  • e-commerce
  • global marketplaces
  • streaming services
  • online gaming
  • content creation
  • remote working
  • cyberbullying
  • internet addiction
  • access to information
  • professional development
  • privacy concerns
  • educational resources
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