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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen?/what are the consequences of this situation?

#people #life #work #talent #happen #consequences #situation
Nowadays, many
people
suffering
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 going to
work
 and spending their time in a job they are not satisfied with or they have no passion
on
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for
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.
This
 problem is based on many factors and
lead
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leads
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 to many bad consequences.
First
, many
people
 their basic reason to
get
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getting
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work
 is money they don’t have many options so they make a deal
to
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at
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 any open chance.
Second
, due to the high living expenses men and women both
they
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apply
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need to
work
 to handle all family essentials and don’t feel guilty about their children’s needs.
Third
, due to the low number of companies in comparison to the number of graduated and experienced
people
,
it’s
 very hard to get a job in his career. All these factors lead to many consequences one of them
mentally
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.
For example
, accepting a job in
different
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a different
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 major
then
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than
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 your passion and educational level it's very hard to accept and not all
people
 cooperate with the situation they are in which makes them feel stressed every day they go to
work
 and they will suffer from depression that will
effect
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affect
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 their relations in
work
 and with their families and friends. To conclude, we don’t get what we ask for all the time, but
it’s
 ok to accept a good opportunity for a while and search for the best at the same time.
It’s
 not easy but
it’s
 not impossible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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