Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is commonly argued that
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who live in metropolitans have a higher chance of suffering from bad
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conditions. I somewhat agree with the statement and
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essay will discuss both sides.
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with, there are a number of factors in big
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which are thought to have a bad effect on
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's
health
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.
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and foremost, it is true that many different kinds of pollution are being produced in urban
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as higher populations have gathered to live than in other
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.
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, light pollution,
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, distracts the citizens from having a sound sleep at night, which is indirectly concerned with
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's
health
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issues. Not only are there indirect factors, but air pollution from exhaust fumes from cars can directly afflict the condition of the public's lungs. Considering the fact that
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living in urban
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are completely surrounded by those, it seems absurdly bad to live in
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.
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, it is
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essential
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close medical facilities are to residential
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.
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, especially when it comes to the elderly, they need to get an off-and-on medical service, since their
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condition could be irregularly worse for many reasons.
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, living in the countryside where
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live rather scattered, they do not have as many facilities as in
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, nor does it take much more time to go to the hospital or emergency clinic.
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, it is of great importance that they can be treated and cured whenever they are in an urgent situation. To conclude, even though there are some specific reasons why rural
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are exposed to a certain medical
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, I believe that
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are a more inappropriate place to live in as far as
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is concerned.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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