Some people think that families have the most powerful influence on a child’s development, while others think other factors such as television, friend, music. etc. gave biggest effects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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social media, the transmission of information has become increasingly fast. Some people look upon families have the most powerful influence on a child’s development. Whereas others refer to other factors as having powerful effects on

children

. As for my perspective, I am in favour of the former and the reasons will be thoroughly elaborated on as follows.

Firstly

, parents can directly share their

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with their child clearly and use the words they could understand to explain.

In other words

,

children

would receive the relatedly correct thought that had been

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by their parents,

this

would help

children

follow the right way to develop themselves.

Secondly

, kids would spend more time

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each other

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causes them to mimic other families' behaviour and thought what they trust without hesitation

this

lead to families having a most powerful effect than other factors

On the other hand

, through television, video ,music or advertisements,

children

could be directly affected by businessmen or society.

That is

,

children

would get various information and influences from the world. Take my experience

for example

. When I was a child,

this

different image or voice have powerfully attractive to me that I cannot resist.

Furthermore

, the idea from the advertisements made by businessmen always evoked my desire to buy the things that I did not really need but that are not suitable for

children

. In conclusion, parents can directly share their

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with their

child

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and give correct ideas to help the

children

develop their own though. It has a more powerful influence than other factors that just give

children

various information without checking on

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themselves.