Write about the following topic: Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

It could be noticed that some
of
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the
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young
use
smartphones
for hours each day. There are certainly some causes
to
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this
phenomenon and I think that it is negative. Several reasons contribute to
this
increasingly prominent situation.
To begin
with, the development of technology and the enormous flow of cheaper
smartphones
in the market make
children
have
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easier access to them. Nowadays, nearly every family can afford to buy one or even more
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this
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phones so no wonder
children
can
use
it
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frequently.
Second
, some adults do not set a good example and sometimes they just allow kids to indulge themselves.
For instance
, some parents do not control their
children
's using
smartphones
;
however
, they watch videos on Tiktok together with their
children
. No one can deny that
smartphone
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can benefit
children
to a certain degree since the videos they watch and the games they play could be educational and informative, which may broaden their horizons and train their hands-on ability.
However
,
this
development may serve
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an extremely bad purpose if
children
spent too much time on phones. For one thing, watching the screen for hours does harm to
children
's eyes, which usually gives rise to short-sightedness.
For instance
, it should be noted that an increasing number of
children
put on
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eye glasses
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at younger ages. For another, the more
children
use
smartphones
, the more they are likely
encounter
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violent or sexual images, which disappoints and upsets quite a few parents. To conclude,
the
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technology,
market
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as well as some adults
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are mainly responsible for the existence of the situation, and the drawbacks of
children
’s playing
smartphones
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for hours long should be fully recognised. It is encouraged that all
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young people
to
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use
such
a digital device for good
purpose
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and within
time
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limit.
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