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Nowadays many young people leave home at an early age to either study or work in another city. Do you think this has more advantages or disadvantages for young people?

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Recently, a great number of young people leave their
hometown
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 at early
ages
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 in order to work or study in different cities. It is argued that
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 has positive or negative effects
for
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 young people
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I agree with
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 side of
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 statement since
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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depends
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 on the personality but
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the advantages
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 are more general
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 as maturity or new talents.
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 and foremost,moving to another city whatever the purpose gives them
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freedom about where it is going to be and living somewhere new affect their maturity
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process
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 in a better and faster way than their peers since they have to learn how to do budget management in order to pay rent or bills or just to feed themselves properly.
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, they learn adulthood skills at early
ages
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.
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, in
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first
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 days, to avoid the loneliness which they might feel they start to meet new people and build a network and with the help of that,their communication skills rise as well.
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,
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 new network would gain them to explore new cultures with friends from different nations and to get
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 more than before.
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 to that, when they manage to deal
their
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 duties
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 as finals for students or projects for
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employers
employees
employeers
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employees
 their
confidences
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confidence
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 will grow towards higher levels and
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 confidence,guides and leads them to success. To conclude, living in different cities than hometown at early
ages
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have
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 many advantages
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 as new skills, early maturity
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 building confidence.
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 why I argue with the advantages.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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