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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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A proportion of people think that visitors from foreign countries should pay more than local visitors to
visit
 cultural ad tourist attractions.
Moreover
, I agree with
this
 statement considering the economical income for the
country
 and local benefits. There is plenty of kind of tourism in a
country
such
 as
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winter, summer, cultural and food tourism. All these kinds are causing to take tourists into the
country
 and when they come, they stay, eat, travel and most important one is they spend money. According to that local hotels, shops and places not only earn money but earn foreign money as well. As a piece of evidence, if the government charged more in public locations for a
visit
 from foreign ones, the income per
visit
 would be more and it would cause an increased economy for the
country
. For illustration, when I
visit
 'Petra' in Jordan they charged 2 Jordan dinars for Arab union citizens but 100 JD for visitors from other countries.
Furthermore
, if you live in cultural or tourist attraction locations and pay like a
foreign
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, it might be hard to afford for you considering the costs for daily life basics
such
 as rent, restaurants or transportation.
Moreover
, living in a cultural city as well as mine where is Bergama which is known by the name Pergamon, when you are a host for your friends, they want guarding of you. For example, I visited the Castle of Pergamon about 11 times and if they charged me as a visitor as others, I couldn't afford to
visit
 the castle with all my friends. To sum up, charging more to foreign people rather than the locals had increasing economical benefits for governments and it doesn't damage locals
also
 in tourist attraction locations. No need the decline
this
 statement as a local person who lives in a
touristic
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 location.
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