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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of a house or building they live in

#countries #people #history #house
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 the world and our life into a brand new era. News and information travel quickly enough for us to be fed on things that are thousands of miles away. It is
also
 more convenient than ever for
people
 to learn nearly everything to satisfy their curiosity. Interestingly, in some nations, uncovering the history of the property or building they occupied is becoming more popular nowadays. What factors can be counted for
this
 new trend? In my opinion, social
media
 feeds and feeling secure are definitely the main reasons. I will provide
further
 prooves and useful methods for revealing the facts about the building.
To begin
 with, in the era of technology and social
media
, we have heard stories online or news quite often that
people
 finding out valuable ornaments and even cash from their new homes. So other
people
 try to follow the flow, digging up information or history about the new place they live in.
For example
, if the previous owner happens to be a rich person, A piece of valuable
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 or a stash of cash might be hidden or forgotten in the home. It is similar to hitting a jackpot. If it wasn’t for the
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 news or social
media
 posts, these interesting facts would probably die out in just a few blocks. Another factor is that
people
 want to feel safe in the environment they live in, nobody wants to deal with a problematic property. Unfortunate problems like leaking, plumbing even termite infestation have been reported by the
media
 or used as a plot in TV Series and movies.
For instance
, termites hiding behind the walls can be a pain in the neck, not only it puts the inhabitants’ life at threat, but
also
 a huge disaster to the house itself.
Therefore
, it is imperative for
people
 to understand the structure of the building or problems that had occurred in the past. For
people
 to perform any research work to find out about the history of their home, there are a couple of effective strategies. On one hand,
people
 can simply search the web to uncover big events that happened previously. Sometimes it can uncover surprising secrets about the house.
On the other hand
, looking up older census records to gather information. It will tell us who lived there and their social status. If a famous artist or an entrepreneur stayed there for a long time, we might value the house differently.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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