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Some people argue that air travel should be restricted due to pollution and excessive fuel consumption. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The main practical problem that confronts us is applying an intervention based on evidence by comparing more than two techniques to decrease
preoperative
anxiety
 in pediatric patients.
First
 of all , midazolam is considered a gold standard medication for decreasing
preoperative
anxiety
 in children; As well as in treating postoperative behavioural disorders, but due to its rough taste and potential to raise the risk of postoperative delirium caused by Sevoflurance, midazolam is not always tolerated by patients. Rosenbaum (2009, cited in Uyar, 2021, pp. 817-828) Children's
preoperative
anxiety
 can be effectively reduced by age-appropriate audiovisual techniques
such
 as playing video games and giving informative teaching with cartoons. Chow (2016, cited in Uyar, 2021, p. 182-203) Uyar, et al.,(2021) concludes that using a smartphone or iPad is
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 most effective method to alleviate
anxiety
 in the
preoperative
 period, which is the most relevant intervention to nursing practice that can be applied in an operation theatre.
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