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Some students take one year off between school and university. Do advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, all the
students
 choose one thing to continue their life. Someone likes to follow their wishes and find a good job and other efforts to continue their education. Taking a
gap
 gives
students
 select a better choice for continuing their education or finding a new career. In my point of view, there are lots of pros to
this
gap
.
Firstly
, many
students
 dream when high school is finished, they could gain many job opportunities, and because of ,that they decided to take a year to investigate what kind of occupation is suitable for them. So
this
 helps them to consider they are developing individual personalities.
For instance
, they looked for new jobs and kept in touch with the boss to access the best job.
Secondly
, some
students
 were taught about how they could improve their knowledge and transfer them to other people. It's a true colour question for everyone to ask with self.
Besides
, they are interested in reading a lot of books, magazines, and newspapers and travelling to another country until their point of view them were changing. They learned many skills in one year and used them in their life. So, taking a
gap
 between schools and universities gives them
this
 chance. In conclusion, there are lots of positive outlooks for
this
gap
 and if the
students
 try to test themselves so they gain many skills and their life is happy because of a better choice.
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