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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that free helpful acts are welcomed everywhere. It is often believed that some educational subjects,
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 non-paid, for the benefit of society is ought to be obligatory. I strongly support
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 claim and,
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, encourage
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 idea.
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 with, unpaid community service, in my opinion, must be a part of high school programs as
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 subjects do often improve those teens' sense of ethics.
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 is because by helping others, the good inside them do usually get stronger. To illustrate, if a 17 years old teenager helped a blind old man to cross the street, the resultant ethical feeling will empower his self-righteousness. Another reason for his ethical self to be elevated is that whenever good takes place, advantages happen.
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, nations, in my thought, will benefit the most from
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 an act.
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, societies will benefit from the unpaid tasks done by those youngsters. The reason for
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 is that by saving some funds, governments can relocate the money to a more important section.
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, by letting the high schoolers freely improve the neighbourhood, the authorities can save a good amount of money and, yet, invest it in healthcare facilities. As well as the short-term benefits, communities will gain long-term advantages. Raising the youth, in a way emphasizing that help is essential, will result in kind-hearted future adults, who will, eventually, be the pillars of the future. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly think that schools’ programs should contain compulsory unpaid community service.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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