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Last month, you visited another town. You had arranged to meet up with a friend who lives in the town, but you were not able to do so. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - apologise for not meeting him/her - explain why you did not contact him/her earlier - suggest a time and place to meet in the future.

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Dear Jade, Hope you are well. I am writing to apologise that I was in
London
 but I didn't meet you. On top of that, I went to
London
 for my cousin's wedding and I got stuck there. I think you know dancing is always attractive. Unfortunately, my feet
not
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do not
did not
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 feel well after that night,
also
 I dropped my phone in the bath because of my broken feet. My phone didn't work until I came back to Paris,
also
this
 was the main reason I disappeared. I will go to
London
 next month for a business trip and I will have a couple of days free. Are you able to meet up on any day in the second week of October? I am planning to
London
 Eye so we can meet up there and go for a great dinner. Sorry again and I'm looking forward to your reply. Lots of love, Carol
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Consider providing a bit more detail about the cousin's wedding or the events that prevented you from meeting Jade, to enhance the richness of the explanation.
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Try to elaborate slightly more on each point to create a more thorough response, especially around the reasons for not contacting earlier and the future meet-up plan.
coherence cohesion
Work on ensuring that all sentences are complete and avoid fragments to improve readability.
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Your writing tone is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You have clearly structured the letter with a logical flow between the apology, the explanation, and the future plans.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph addresses a single idea clearly, which helps in maintaining the clarity and coherence of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologize
  • Regret
  • Unforeseen circumstances
  • Overwhelming
  • Busy
  • Unexpected
  • Reschedule
  • Availability
  • Convenient
  • Mutually agreeable
  • Apologies
  • Inconvenience
  • Disappointment
  • Miscommunication
  • Misunderstanding
  • Prior commitment
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