Buying things on the internet, such as groceries, books and air tickets is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping this way outweigh the disadvantages.

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For the time being, online shopping is becoming increasingly popular. There are some popular ordering products,
such
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as online, groceries and air tickets. Actually, there are advantages which outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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such
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as ordering without going anywhere and
payingwith
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paying with
playing with
online cash,
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moreover
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there is only
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negative part is
crime
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a crime
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. On the
one
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hand, as we know
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online shopping is very popular in over the world. Online shopping is working in all
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government
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governments
. In my
opinion
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there are some popular webshops,
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as AMAZON, ALIEXPRESS AND ALIBABA. It is clear that a large number of
population
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the population
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use the internet shops
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because there are a lot of conveniences.
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, many people use
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online shopping, because they should not walk anywhere for only
one
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product.
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, if someone wants to buy a t-shirt and he does not want to go anywhere to buy
this
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, he just can order it from the website.
Secondly
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, today a big number of
population
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the population
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is moving to
the
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online cash because many people keep and pay for products by online purse or credit card.
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, in the near
future
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all
human
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humans
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will pay only by credit cards, obviously,
that
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because
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it is so comfortable and useful, surely it makes online shopping
value
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.
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, in my own opinion, there is
an
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only
one
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negative side.
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statement
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is related
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to crime. It is
obviously
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that nowadays hacking is so popular. Hacker is a person who robs
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online money from someone's purse.
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, a customer buys some things and
make
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makes
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an online
paying
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payment
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. While, if there is
hacker
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a hacker
the hacker
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who robs
this
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online money, after that a
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customer
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costumer
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customer
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and salesman will be without money. We can prevent
this
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problem
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by
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with
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paying attention
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about
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private
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the private
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information
of
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credit
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cards
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card
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cards
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. In conclusion, I'm convinced that online shopping is comfortable to use,
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however
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we should be careful with
private
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the private
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information
of
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about
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online
purse
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purses
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • E-commerce
  • Convenience
  • Time-saving
  • Variety
  • Accessibility
  • Competitive pricing
  • Discounts
  • Cost-effective
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Security risk
  • Data breach
  • Product quality
  • Consumer behavior
  • Physical inspection
  • Returns policy
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