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Some people think the government should subside fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Others argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these view and give your opinion.

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A healthy lifestyle is a trend nowadays many pages on social media support the idea and talked about it which is good.
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, the support from the government to subside fruit and vegetable prices and added
tax
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 on harmful food will make
people
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 no excuses to follow a healthy lifestyle. In my opinion, the balance between these thoughts makes a powerful work for raising a healthy generation. On the one hand, I agree that the
tax
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 option will help reduce the consumption of harmful food. But,
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 will not work for all
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. At
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,
people
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 need to be educated about the right concept and instructions for healthy eating,
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 they will be opened for the change easily.
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, in Saudi Arabia, they put a
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 on sugar items but
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 didn’t work because the vegetables and fruits stay at the
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instructions
.
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, reducing the price of vegetables and fruits is a great idea to motivate
people
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 to make more healthy dishes. Indeed
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 strategy of passing on price reductions directly to the
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costumer
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 seems to have a greater impact on eating habits. To conclude, the balance between ebbing fruits and veggies price and a ding
tax
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 unhealthy food must be supported by free awareness lectures and workshops to build a
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 mental relationship as well.
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