As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. why does this happen? how does this affect society

The families
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who have been living in developed
countries
are tend
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to birth less
number
of
children
. In my opinion, it is because, the
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countries
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countires
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countries
developed by
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citizens
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socio-cultural
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levels
level
levesl
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, and people who had high socio-cultural
level
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are considering
about
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the quality of
theirs
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and
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their children'
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children'
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lives, but it could have been damaging to the public. The developed
countries
recognized
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by
their
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quality of
life
for their citizens. They ensure their societies'
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welfare
wellfare
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welfare
which
include
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safety, economy and utilities and it can't be done without
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increasing the
increasingthe
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increasing the
number
of educated
publics
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.
The families
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who have
high
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level
of education are caring about their
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children's
childiren's
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children's
life
for
present
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and future
also
. They want to provide
thier
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their
childiren
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children
with the best
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opportunities
oppurtinities
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opportunities
and as
an
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evidence
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they decide
childiren
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children
number
beforehand
of
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which they can afford . A significant aspect of
argument
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is that
,
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they
also
know how to protect themselves from unwanted babies by as known named birth-control methods.
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, developed
countries
are the best
arriving
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location for immigration. Immigrants who escape from bad conditions in their
hometown
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want safety
life
for
living
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, but because of the
circumcitances
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circumstances
in their country, their socio-cultural
level
couldn't be equal
with
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citizens of developed
countries
.
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of getting comfortable and safe
life
,
childiren
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children
number
of a family
is explode
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by refugees who
doesn't
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know how to prevent
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unaffordable
unaffortable
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population.
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, the
children
whom
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controlling by nobody might be a safety problem as stray dogs or they would take down the
level
of education which
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encouraged
encourged
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encouraged
by already developed, developing
countries
. To sum up, some country leaders
such
as Turkey's
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president
presedent
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President
R. Tayyip Erdogan gives
speech
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about how to prevent
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the bad
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affect
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effect
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with
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birth
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the birth
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more
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children
than refugees but immigration is an increasing problem day by day. As a
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solution
solition
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solution
of mine, we have to stay on not only increasing the education
level
but
also
diminish
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the population
explotion
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explosion
with
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taking
the
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immigration under control and
ensure
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the refugees'
children
to be
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a part of society.
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