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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

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Some
parents
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 believe that giving so much freedom to do and buy everything that the
children
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 want is a good method to nurture them. In my perspective, it is not a good option. In
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 might think that
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total freedom to try everything that they want, especially because they have a big curiosity about the world.
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 think that
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 will encourage them to be more active and confident to express their feelings, and
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 will build and strengthen their personal character.
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 believe that if
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 could buy everything, they can learn and understand
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life much better.
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, if they dream to be an astronaut and they can buy rocket toys, they will have a stronger motivation to read and learn about their passion in the future.
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, there will be many consequences that might follow.
Children
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 might become a snob person who dislikes others who come from a lower social class. They usually think that they are richer, smarter and better than everyone else.
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, they usually want to be a superior person in their community and might end up being an intractable person, who cannot negotiate with others.
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 will lead to a big problem in their future especially if they work in a team, they might have no empathy and the worst is that they might experience
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mental illness. To conclude, it is not a good option to nurture
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 by giving them
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 to do and buy everything that they want, because there will be many consequences that might
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 when they get older.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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