Some employers offer their employees subsidized membership of gyms or sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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provide their

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subsidized

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of gyms or sports clubs since they believe

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will increase

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’ health quality and so more productivity at work while other

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find it pointless. In

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I will examine both sides and explain why I agree with the previous idea.

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, in some work lines,

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use their physical strength in order to make the job done

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as construction

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or firefighters and these sorts of jobs demand so much energy and focus

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without the employees might get injured.

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, some

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do not believe that

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with a subsidy is necessary or helpful. In fact, they might think that would be dangerous for their

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because of muscle tiredness and

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it would be too expensive for some

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to afford.

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, when we consider white collars, they mostly work by sitting and looking at screens for long hours so a chance to exercise would be beneficial to them and the subsidized

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would make the job preferable for the candidates.

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to that, it motivates them as well.

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, some research had proved that

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who exercise regularly have better success rates compared to the ones who do not in the same positions.

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statement is reasonable for

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in order to increase their

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’ efficiency. To conclude,

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decision should be coordinated with professional fields even if there are some

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who think offering subsidized

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to a gym or sports club will not do any good, I argue

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since it would make some difference for

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considering health and motivation and the contribution which happens to their performance but

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decision should be coordinated with profession fields.