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Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information

#internet #communication #people #place #information
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Internet
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The Internet
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 is a recent platform where we can navigate and
it’s
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 available
in
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on
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 our computers, tablets and smartphones.
Internet
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 nowadays is used by
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most
of
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the
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people to work,
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study,
to
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watch tv,
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play
videogames
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video games
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,
to
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search
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information
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for information
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 and many other things available
in
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this
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 platform.
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Its’s
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 believed that
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 an amazing tool for communication because there are many
websites
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 like WhatsApp, Skype, Facebook,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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 that we can use to communicate with friends and family members. The
websites
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 mentioned above are called social media and they have plenty
options
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of options
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 like the
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video
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videocall
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video call
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, which I have used many times for meetings, my thesis presentation,
jobs
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and jobs
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 interview.
It’s
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 quite useful because we can speak and see the person on the other side of the computer, at the same time. Without
this
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 tool, wouldn’t be possible to communicate that easily with people who are
thousands
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quilometers
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kilometres
 away from us. Despite the
Internet
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’s world
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 amazing, it has its own disadvantages. In the
platform
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 we can find a vast amount of
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 about everything and
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 hard to filter the important and the
truth
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true
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information
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. One of the major examples,
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the
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‘fake
news’
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news
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 is full of that type of content where the
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 isn’t accurate or is not even true. I believe that
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the Internet
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 is very informative, but
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 essential to read the news on
trustful
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trustworthy
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websites
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such
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 as CNN or BBC News.
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, there are many other
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 like Wikipedia that aren’t
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good
source
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sources
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 of
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.
This
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 one is open to everyone who
want
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 to write down any type of content, of
course
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 that in the end what was written is revised before being posted online, but it isn’t trustworthy. To sum up,
Internet
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 has advantages and disadvantages and
it’s
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 crucial to take the best of it, finding a balance between all the available info and
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 what’s reliable .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Democratize access
  • Instant messaging
  • Real-time conversations
  • Credible sources
  • Misinformation
  • Unverified facts
  • Reputable news outlets
  • Biased opinions
  • Algorithm-driven content
  • Overreliance
  • Traditional methods
  • Search engines
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