Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?
It is argued that the therapy costs a lot and better follow the prevention measures to avoid some
illnesses
. This
essay agrees with this
opinion. This
essay will first
illustrate how people could protect themself from disease without spending money and then
discuss preventive measures that every person should follow to reduce health
problems
and high expenses on it in the future.
Nowadays, many illnesses
individuals can catch just because they do not protect themselves from negative factors what
lead to Correct word choice
that
health
problems
. Such
factors as unhealthy lifestyle, eating junk food, non-compliance with hygiene, close contact with people who have the flu and other relevant factors. To avoid the risk of disease, a person should follow simple rules such
as take
care of Replace the word
taking
itself
, Correct pronoun usage
himself
wash
Wrong verb form
washing
the
hands after visiting public places, Change the word
their
her
his
use
Wrong verb form
using
the
medicine mask in crowded places and Correct article usage
a
develop
superior habits, Wrong verb form
developing
such
as eating vegetables and drinking vitamins. For instance
, during the pandemic situation
many people caught the virus just because did not follow simple rules and some countries, Add a comma
,situation
such
as Singapore, where there was the least number of infections, has
proved that strict preventive measures work in the fight against viruses.
Another method considered more costly, but still productive in the prevention of some Correct subject-verb agreement
have
diseases
is every
year medical Correct determiner usage
a
checking
. Some Replace the word
check
illnesses
can be recognised only by medical Add a hyphen
check-in
check in
. Certainly, Add a hyphen
check-in
this
is not the cheapest way of protection from diseases
, but in some cases
it is a critical fact to avoid even higher costs for the treatment of the disease itself and what is much more valuable is that it helps detect serious Add a comma
,cases
diseases
at an early stage. For example
, according
medical research 90% of serious Add the preposition
toaccording
health
problems
detected during a medical examination can be cured at an early stage without major financial investment and without further
health
complications.
To conclude, this
essay supports the idea that better prevent the
Correct article usage
apply
diseases
, firstly
because it costs nothing just to follow some rules which could help to avoid some illnesses
, such
as viral diseases
, and secondly
is critical to do a medical examination to avoid some serious problems
with a
Remove the article
apply
health
what could lead to high expenses to cure it.Submitted by dulskywork on
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