Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

It is argued that the therapy costs a lot and better follow the prevention measures to avoid some
illnesses
.
This
essay agrees with
this
opinion.
This
essay will
first
illustrate how people could protect themself from disease without spending money and
then
discuss preventive measures that every person should follow to reduce
health
problems
and high expenses on it in the future. Nowadays, many
illnesses
individuals can catch just because they do not protect themselves from negative factors
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lead to
health
problems
.
Such
factors as unhealthy lifestyle, eating junk food, non-compliance with hygiene, close contact with people who have the flu and other relevant factors. To avoid the risk of disease, a person should follow simple rules
such
as
take
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care of
itself
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,
wash
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the
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their
her
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hands after visiting public places,
use
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the
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medicine mask in crowded places and
develop
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superior habits,
such
as eating vegetables and drinking vitamins.
For instance
, during the pandemic
situation
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many people caught the virus just because did not follow simple rules and some countries,
such
as Singapore, where there was the least number of infections,
has
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proved that strict preventive measures work in the fight against viruses. Another method considered more costly, but still productive in the prevention of some
diseases
is
every
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year medical
checking
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. Some
illnesses
can be recognised only by medical
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check in
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. Certainly,
this
is not the cheapest way of protection from
diseases
, but in some
cases
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it is a critical fact to avoid even higher costs for the treatment of the disease itself and what is much more valuable is that it helps detect serious
diseases
at an early stage.
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,
according
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medical research 90% of serious
health
problems
detected during a medical examination can be cured at an early stage without major financial investment and without
further
health
complications. To conclude,
this
essay supports the idea that better prevent
the
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diseases
,
firstly
because it costs nothing just to follow some rules which could help to avoid some
illnesses
,
such
as viral
diseases
, and
secondly
is critical to do a medical examination to avoid some serious
problems
with
a
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health
what could lead to high expenses to cure it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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