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What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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In the
last
 100 years , there are many inventions occur which improve the life of human beings throughout the
world
 ,,
However
 one discovery which really supports my country's people is easy and ready access to
internet
 facilities.
This
 facility connects everyone throughout the
world
 and makes the
world
 a global village.
Firstly
, the easiest mode of communication is the telephone.
Furthermore
, when
this
 telephone is connected to the
internet
 ,people can communicate throughout the
world
 with their loved ones at anywhere and anytime.
Moreover
, people can work online in other countries which
improve
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 their financial status and bring prosperity to the country.
Secondly
, media plays a pivotal role in today's personal life.Through
internet
 access individual keeps herself/himself updated about the latest updates happening in the
world
 which helps him/her to take decisions
accordingly
. Satellite informs us about the weather, research, navigation etc and it is only the
internet
 connection which supports and conveys information. In the end, it is only an
internet
 connection which connects everyone in the
world
 and surely it is one of the biggest inventions of the 21st century.
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