Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on improving health and education. Discuss both arguments and give your opinion

Relocation is always a challenge. We
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from one place to another more
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five times already, and we are going to move again.
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emotional. We’ve been in Turkey for 8 months already. There are its own benefits and drawbacks, but no matter what, we love
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climate, clear sky, blue sea and absolutely stunning nature make
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living with kids. Welcoming people and delicious cuisine are making integration easy and smooth. It was perfect 8 months we are living near mountains and sea, our son learned to swim here, found friends and became more healthy! Previously he got cold every month or so, but here he got ill about 2 or 3 times and it was
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. We
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found friends here and that makes our farewell more emotional. We spent a lot of time,
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each other and having fun together. Unfortunately, we became really close-knit when we already took tickets and had a plan, so it was kinda late to change
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vital part
  • culture and heritage
  • attracting tourists
  • promote diversity
  • foster creativity
  • fundamental needs
  • directly impact
  • economic performance
  • productive workforce
  • widespread benefits
  • solid foundation
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