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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Is this a positive or negative development?

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The rapid growth of
technology
 has changed the way of living. Specifically, with the
introduction
 of the internet and social media,
people
 can now connect and communicate with just one click of a button. Some
people
 argue that the deep involvement of
technology
 in human life has a negative impact on society and has affected the types of relationships
people
 make. Though I disagree with
this
 point of view and see
this
 change as a positive development. The factors leading to my argument are described below. Due to the
introduction
 of
technology
, the
world
 is like a global village and there are many positive developments in the field of communication.
First
 and most important is being able to connect to anyone and anywhere in the
world
. With the
introduction
 of platforms like "LinkedIn '' and other similar portals,
people
 can now not only find jobs in their hometowns but
also
 anywhere in the
world
. Not only that now
people
 can
also
 work from anywhere in the
world
 and can visit the office if needed. Other than the above, communication nowadays is very swift and easy. Before the 21st century, even in the era of the telephone, it was very difficult and slow for
people
 to know about the status of their close ones.
Secondly
, with social media
people
 can now connect with many
people
 whom they think have similar likes and interests which will broaden their point of view and eventually will have a positive impact on their personality. To conclude, due to the
introduction
 of
technology
 human society has progressed rapidly. And
this
 progress has a far more positive impact on society when compared with the negative impacts.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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