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Some people feel that cities should be planned to be lovely whereas others feel their usefulness is more vital. This essay outline main benefits and drawbacks of this controversial question.

#people #cities #usefulness #outline
On the one hand, everyone wants to be surrounded by
spectacular
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 view and one way or another it
bring
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 them pleasure.
Furthermore
,a lot of
people
 reckon that the
beautifulness
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 of towns has a direct effect on their spirit.
For instance
, a well-known psychologist from
USA
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, John Reyon, assures that colourfulness and creatively built
cities
improves
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 the mental state of
people
.
This
 statement is proven by Reyon’s researchers that demonstrated that
people
 who
was
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 living in bleak towns
was
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 more depressed than
people
 who used to live in
cities
 that
filled
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 with beauty.
Moreover
, one more benefit from it,
that
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 lots of
people
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 their
cities
 by planting flowers and trees,
subsequently
 reducing air pollution.
On the other hand
,
view
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the view
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 that I support, the functionality of the city is considered more important to
people
. It means that accessibility of services to all
people
 is way more needed as these are the basic things that
people
 use every day. It is crucial for citizens
having
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 access to public transportation or
visiting
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 hospitals anytime or educate their children in
modern
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a modern
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school
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. So it’s better
receive
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height
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 level of
services
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 than just observing incredible views without functionality. To put it another way, if
people
 have confidence in the town's ability to function, they might feel safer about their own security. To conclude, if a city is beautiful and practical,
people
 will appreciate it. Of course ,it is crucial to maintain
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colorfulness
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 of
cities
 in order to support citizens mentally and helped them to breathe freely with fresh and unpolluted air . But in general,
idea
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the idea
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 that I support
,
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 is that attractive
cities
 are valued as long as they are practical.
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