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children can learn effectively by watching TV and they should be encouraged to watch TV both at school and at home. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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The increase in technological advances worldwide has made screen
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 possible in every possible location. While some believe that their offspring can effectively learn by watching
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 and feel that
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 practice should be encouraged both at school and home, I must express that I believe in the complete opposite and disagree. On the one hand, many will agree as they feel that watching
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 provides insightful information.
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, there are many
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 shows which are specially designed for babies to adolescents ranging from nursery rhymes to scientific shows respectively.
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 can be very informative as many children may be visual and auditory learners,
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, my thoughts are to completely disagree and hold the opinion that
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 can have many long-lasting negative implications.
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, research suggests that prolonged
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 hours can lead to a sedentary lifestyle, ultimately causing obesity which in turn can lead to increased risks of cardiovascular diseases, diabetes and increased blood pressure.
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, too much exposure to
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 light can disrupt sleep cycles making it difficult to have a peaceful sleep.
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, research proved that children exposed to
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 light have altered levels of melatonin, inducing more wake
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 and less sleep.
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 ,digital dependency and screen addiction has become a nuisance over
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 or reading a book they would much prefer to choose the former,
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 causing a decrease in creativity and intelligence.
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, we can clearly see how increased use of screen
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 at both home and school can negatively impact our youth. To conclude, I strongly disagree and must emphasise that
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 should be limited as substantially long hours of
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 can have profound effects physically and mentally and should be avoided at home as well as school.

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