Very few school children learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

It is true that nowadays just a small number of youngsters are aware of the importance of finances and how to manage them. Some people claim that
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literacy should be included as a school subject. I absolutely agree with
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statement and
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essay will extensively explain the reasons to support my opinion based on real-life examples.
To begin
with, finance management is a crucial life skill in the modern world. The majority of people are taught how to work with
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and how to solve difficult mathematical equations.
However
, a truly valuable experience, which money managing undoubtedly is, is out of
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.
Thus
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school graduates will not be able to look after their credits and expenses. Unfortunately, neither schools nor universities educate their student
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literate,
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care full with their expenses in order to avoid the risk of future burdens. Another thing is that if a child does not acknowledge the importance of wealth, they will grow into
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irresponsible adult who spends money without considering the consequences. I believe that
this
is a huge problem in our society of consumption. Children get things easily from their parents who are working hard,
then
they prefer just going to a bank and getting
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credit. Many people
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involved in high-priced addictions
such
as shopping
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,
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playing etc. In a nutshell, analyzing the above we can conclude that it is important to start teaching
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literacy and the value of money at school. By doing
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, the government ensures that schools graduate well-educated and responsible individuals
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all means of
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world
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Consequently
, the majority of the population will acknowledge the power of wealth, which will lead to a stronger community.
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