Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternatives medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think it is a negative or positive development?

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Some studies found that there is a trend of people with sickness preferring alternative methods
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of regular ways. While I believe that people have the right to choose any treatment for their personal
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, I agree that it has some adverse effects because they don’t have enough knowledge compared to specialists. To start off, choosing their own treatment through a bit of research on the internet is way more affordable. With small common
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symptoms
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symptoms
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as coughing and sneezing,
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they will just carelessly assume they got
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.
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, I myself sometimes have a stomachache which is what I assume that just a symptom of skipping meals. Long story short, it was a
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problem
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of what I thought it would be.
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, spending a visit to a doctor may cost more but you get the right treatment. From that, doctors who dedicated their youth to
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healthcare knowledge will guide you to the right treatments which suit
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the
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problems you have. There are no need
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example
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how good
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a doctor
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is. Obviously, Doctors are a reliable system in government.
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as Vietnam, we call Doctor
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“Bac” and
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mean the trustest plus the greatest one in
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. Taking everything above into account, it can be said choosing alternative treatments should not be taken lightly, given the side
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on our
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.
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, I firmly believe that
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diagnoses with treatments are best for healthcare.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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