Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere; this has bad effect on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

In modern society, fast
food
has become popular in many countries in the world,
although
I totally agree with
this
statement that fast
food
has negative impacts on our lifestyle and diet, I think it
also
has some benefits. On the one hand, eating junk
food
can be responsible for many health problems. These types of foods
full
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are full
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unhealthy
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ingredients
such
as fat, sugar, oil, salt, cheese and other additives which cause many diseases like diabetes, cancers, strokes, and high blood pressure.
Additionally
, fast
food
eaters usually have
short
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life.
As a result
, they are not able to build a successful future.
For example
, If people eat pizza
than
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they should, it is
risk
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a risk
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obesity
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, because it contains many unhealthy materials.
Therefore
,
this
fatty
food
can produce adverse effects on our bodies.
On the other hand
, fast
food
provides a convenient lifestyle for us. Today, many people have to study and work.
As a result
, these busy people are to eat fast
food
. They are not delicious but
also
is
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prepared easily in a short time.
For instance
, students who
are study
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are studying
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out of their hometown do not have any choice except
fast
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for fast
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food
to eat during the week. Due
to
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, they
have
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not enough time to cook
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a meal
the meal
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meal
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. Because they have to do work or hard
to
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apply
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study. In conclusion,
however
, fast
food
is more convenient to prepare, I agree these kinds of junk
food
have detrimental effects on our lifestyle.
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Example:

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