you live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer

Dear Smith, My name is Jimena Ilaria, I am attending Medicine college, and I am writing to you in regard to some disturbances I have been facing the
last
weeks in my
room
. As you may be aware we are in the toughest part of the semester, having to take the final exam
at the end
of the month. My colleague, the one with whom I am sharing the
room
, has been inviting friends to the
room
and they stay chatting until midnight. Even though I had already told her several times that I
need
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silence in the
room
and to please go somewhere else with their friends, she seemed to not care. I would very much appreciate it if you could change me to another
room
, I do not mind sharing a flat with someone else, I do not really need to be on my own but I really do need to be with someone respectful and understanding, that it is not the case right now. Thank you for your attention on
this
matter, I eagerly await your response. Yours sincerely, Jimena Ilaria
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task achievement
Try to include a specific request or desired outcome in the closing paragraph to strengthen the task response.
coherence cohesion
Consider using transition phrases between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow of ideas.
task achievement
The letter maintains a formal and polite tone, which is suitable for addressing an accommodation officer.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used and display politeness and professionalism.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the situation, making it easy for the reader to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation officer
  • roommate
  • share a room
  • living arrangement
  • difficult to work
  • noise levels
  • study environment
  • privacy concerns
  • alternative accommodation
  • single room
  • academic performance
  • well-being
  • respectfully request
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