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Overpopulation in urban areas has led to numerous problem. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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Many countries of the world are experiencing many problems and one of them is
rapidly
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 growing populace in cities. I believe with the help of
government
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the government
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 and
people
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the people
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 we can overcome these issues. I will support
this
 view with arguments in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with
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 overpopulation can lead to
a
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poor quality of houses. Cities are brimming with
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people and due to
overcrowding
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,overcrowding
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 there
are
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 no
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 to
contruct
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construct
 houses for families.
Moreover
, homes that
already
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are already
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 made
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in
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 good quality, because of less space,
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 are no heating and cooling system. In terms of an explication for
this
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controversy
 government should provide
well maintained
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 housing and health care for all its
critizens
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citizens
.
Furthermore
, the price of things is
also
 increasing.
As a result
, poor people cannot afford to buy anything. Turning to
solution
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 now, the
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authority
authoriy
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authority
 can tackle the challenge of poor housing by proper urban planning,
taking
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 down poorly constructed. For the individual, it is important to take
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responsibility
responsiblity
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responsibility
 for a
health
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 society by making sure every house built has
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the necessary
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convenience
conference
convinence
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convenience
 facilities. They should obey
law
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the law
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 of proper waste disposal and avoid using cars when possible.
Therefore
, it is clear that the troubles caused by overpopulation in urban areas one very serious. Yet if authorities and individuals share a collective control,
then
 it may well become possible to offer some explications. In conclusion, it is clear that troubles are caused due to growth of
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. Yet I think these
controveries
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controversies
 can be solved if
this
 collective
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responsibility
responsiblity
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responsibility
shared
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is shared
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 between humans and law firms.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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