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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of distance learning. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It goes without saying that distance learning is gaining popularity in recent years due to Covid-19.
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 essay will examine the pros and cons of online education and I will be arguing in favour of
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 type of interaction. In order to prevent the spread of the coronavirus epidemic all over the world, most governments preferred to change
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 training format in schools and universities. These innovations forced
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 rethink approaches to organizational processes. Remote learning made it possible to reduce
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 costs of participants,
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 as utility services, administrative fees,
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 payments.
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, at the same
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 it caused plenty of issues that did have to be solved.
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, the biggest part of the lecturers did not use IT technologies in their practice for teaching optimization.
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, the quality of class presentations was not satisfying at the beginning of
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 interaction.
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, international and local internships were a basis for a qualitative improvement of
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 of tutors.
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, recent
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 have shown
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significant growth of IT innovations that were implemented in academic background. In spite of visible benefits, there are some demerits of e-learning introduction that are caused by the vital importance of offline laboratory lessons for several specializations.
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, being a doctor needs a clear illustration of an algorithm of
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 on practical examples.
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, a lack of experience in the period of
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 will slow down
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the involvement
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 of newly acquired abilities.
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,
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 possibilities of every student should be taken into account as
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 sort of communication creates unequal conditions
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 gaining knowledge. To sum up, I would like to point out crucial advantages of training online that undoubtedly are connected with the improvement of educational transformation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distance learning
  • Flexibility
  • Accessibility
  • Cost-effective
  • Courses
  • Technology skills
  • Personalized
  • Upskill
  • Social interaction
  • Self-discipline
  • Connectivity
  • Hands-on experience
  • Employer recognition
  • Learning outcomes
  • Online degrees
  • Platforms
  • In-person training
  • Learning styles
  • Practical subjects
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