Do you think Corruption has become world wide issue ? What steps we can take to control corruption ?

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In the recent world, we often see news about unlawful

bribe giving

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and collusion between public servants and private companies.

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is a problem of not only for

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particular

countries

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or regions,

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however

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it is becoming an issue all over the world. I would like to discuss

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critical subject in our society and go on to propose some suggested

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for

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a solution

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to avoid corruption in the days to come.

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of all,

collusions

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committed by politicians and industrial leaders

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not a subject only in developing

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in developed

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nowadays.

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, the recent Olympic games in Japan

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became a trigger to a huge scandal related to an illegal payoff made by a local manufacturer to a leader of a famous consultant

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agencies

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. We see similar news almost

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in other parts of the world.

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, I would like to discuss some

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counter measures

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to prevent

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kind of illegal

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conduct

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. Probably, the

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and the most important remedy is to stop a situation that one person in any industry or governmental body

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too much power concentrating him or her.

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, society

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appropriate monitoring systems that can closely investigate any big projects involving

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amount of investment and can quickly alert when an ambiguous fund transfer occurs.

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but equally important, institutions which have chances to be engaged in these types of events should give their employees repeated

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and remind

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is right and what is not. In conclusion, the issue of criminal collisions

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not

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problem of the past for many

countries

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these days.

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, I believe, by avoiding

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of power, implementing

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monitoring system, and giving work force needed

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training

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this

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critical issue can be reduced in future.

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