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Some people say that drug companies have a responsibility to spend money researching medicines that will help people in poor countries. Others say that the main responsibility of drug companies is to make money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
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 have different views about the responsibility of the
drug
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industry
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. While some
people
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 argue that medicine companies should focus on making a profit, I believe that both social responsibilities and commercial needs should be satisfied. On the one hand, medicine manufacturers should be responsible for investments to help impoverished populations.
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, it is morally right to help those who are in need. It costs only a tiny amount of
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 for
drug
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 giants to develop new medicines that can make poor
people
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 live
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healthy life.
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, a lot of African children are suffering from malaria, which can sometimes be deadly, and they have no means to receive or afford effective medicines. By donating
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 or sending free
drugs
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 to them, the
drug
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industry
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 can easily save their lives.
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, researching new
drugs
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 not only save impoverished
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 but
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 boost the development of the medical
industry
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. These new
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 can be
further
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 used for patients around the world.
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, revenue is essential to
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 companies as well. Without sufficient income, they would be unlikely to pay salaries to their employees.
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 makes it impossible to maintain any scientific research on medicines. Medicine companies are not charities. They are responsible for their investors, employees and scientists. Profit is an essential factor to keep any company running.
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, making
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 should and could not be the main purpose of the
drug
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industry
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. If the only purpose of a
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 company is to make a profit,
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 the price of
drugs
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 will be unaffordable for many patients.
This
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 will have a detrimental impact on humans' future. In conclusion, I believe that the medical
industry
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 should make
money
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 and take social responsibility to help
people
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 in impoverished nations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate social responsibility
  • sustainability
  • innovate
  • profitable
  • humanitarian
  • financial health
  • incentivizing
  • neglected diseases
  • ethical implications
  • exclusive rights
  • accessible
  • navigate challenges
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