Some people think that all young people should be required to stay in full-time education until at least the age of 18. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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day until the age of 18.
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they won't have time for other activities that are essential for their growth and make them
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lots of attention, so if
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Education is importaant. smart and intelligent I disagree More time for other activities sports, games, time with friends and family
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Compulsory education
  • Holistic development
  • Disengagement
  • Academically inclined
  • Aspirations
  • Vocational training
  • Apprenticeships
  • Practical skills
  • Exacerbate
  • Inequalities
  • Labor market
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