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Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by private companies rather than governments. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that the question of whether the states or private enterprises should bear the responsibility for conducting scientific
research
 remains a source of controversy. While there are minor positive aspects of
this
 trend in the short term, I would argue that overall, these are outweighed by enormous disadvantages. On the one hand, one advantage is that private companies are incentive to innovate and contribute to the public good. Examples of
this
 behaviour abound though they are less likely to receive excessive media attention.
Such
 breakthroughs include medicines
such
 as, very recently, the vaccines for Covid-19 developed by Pfizer, and the technologies that big corporations
such
 as Apple, and Google have pioneered over the decade. These private enterprises are able to hire and remunerate the best employees and are often driven by competition to be innovative and strive to make discoveries that benefit the general citizenry
On the other hand
, I believe that there are significant benefits if states determine the direction of scientific
research
 for the well-being of their people. Those in favour of state control over
research
 argue that governments are not motivated to generate revenue.
Moreover
, the highest standards can be set by providing funding for university departments to carry out high-quality
research
 to meet public needs, not to break into new markets or gain a competitive edge. As competition between companies is eliminated, the sharing of knowledge through international cooperation among the scientific community becomes prevalent. In conclusion, it seems to me that the advantages of placing the responsibility for scientific
research
 in the government's hands far outweigh any disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • controlled research
  • private sector
  • governmental oversight
  • innovations
  • R&D (Research and Development)
  • privatization
  • diversification
  • profit motive
  • breakthrough
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • intellectual property
  • commercial value
  • fundamental research
  • profitable ventures
  • socially beneficial
  • knowledge sharing
  • skewed research
  • ethical considerations
  • oversight
  • market demand
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