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School going children should not be allowed to use internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people advocate that
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 should be forbidden for students because of their ongoing education.
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, I disagree with
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 might assist them in many ways when
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the
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searching and studying by themselves or with their peers.
Firstly
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, in
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 is essential for the public and especially for
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students because of their assignments for
school
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 grades.Students can search and find
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 relevant information in order to complete their projects
by
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internet
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.
For example
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, websites
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like Wikipedia or Pubmed are great sources to complete
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academic research.
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, forbidding
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 for
school
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 children would generate some problems for them when they are researching.
Furthermore
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, when it comes to studying there are some websites which are streaming
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 of videos and they are free of charge as well. A student who has some trouble
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understanding math subjects at
school
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 can easily find some lesson videos on websites like Youtube. If parents don't let their kids
to
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use
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, they
would't
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wouldn't
would
 provide what is
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necessary
nessecary
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necessary
 for their younger
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. On top of that, in some classes at primary or secondary schools, pupils get benefits from the
internet
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 connection on their smartphones when they are playing educational exercises about their current subjects while supervised by teachers.
Therefore
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, the
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their
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 learning even
at
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school
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 environments. To summarize, even if some people believe that the
internet
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to
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school
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 boys and girls I advocate
otherwise
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.
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 is a
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useful
usefull
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useful
 tool for every pupil and it provides them
to
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for
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 the information which they might need when they are studying and completing educational duties as
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assignments
assessments
assingments
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assignments
. My personal thought about
this
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.

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