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Some people say that Ebooks and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In our time, modern
technologies
 give a
lot
 of benefits. Something new, fairly often, replaces old things. It means that often
people
use
 modern
technologies
,
instead
 of traditional
technologies
, items. But sometimes,
people
 just don’t want to
use
 modern developments, like
Ebook
. A
lot
 of
people
 say that
Ebook
 will totally replace traditional
books
 and magazines. I agree that it will, but don’t think that will totally replace it and I have some arguments why. I agree
,
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 because
Ebook
don’t
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doesn’t
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 take
a
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up a
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lot
 of space. For traditional newspapers, magazines,
books
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and books
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 you need to have a place
,
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when
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where
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 you will fold them. If a person likes reading so much and has a
lot
 of
books
, it means that
this
 person has a
lot
 of
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shelves
shelf
shells
shelfs
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, which take up so much space and collect dust. Or visit the library, but in
this
 way,
people
 spend a
lot
 of time getting to the library.
Ebook
 relieves a person of these problems
,
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 because you can have all your
books
in
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on
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 1 tablet. But I disagree that modern
technologies
 can totally replace traditional
books
.
Reason
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 is that
books
 are deprived of history. I mean that every work that has ever been written, has
his
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its
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 own history.
For example
, history says that Franze Kafka
burn
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burns
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 80%
all
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of all
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 his works,
this
 fact gives uniqueness to the works that now we can read. Unfortunately, Ebooks
devoid
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 of
such
 romance. But from here we can take 1 more advantage.
Last
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 argument, why I agree, is that you can’t lose
book
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the book
a book
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. When you
use
Ebook
, it’s impossible to
accidently
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accidentally
 destroy your newspaper, you can’t do any damage. But in
this
situation
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 if you broke your
Ebook
, you can buy
new
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a new
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 one and just download
that
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one that
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 you had before. In
conclusion
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 I can say that in all modern
technologies
 there are 2 sides: good and bad. The main question is
this
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whether this
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 technology is helpful or not. If yes, logically that better
use
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to use
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this
, but of
course
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,course
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 you always can
use
 traditional, habitual things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • eBooks
  • digital media
  • traditional newspapers
  • magazines
  • modern technology
  • replace
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • interactive features
  • environmental benefits
  • paper waste
  • news consumption habits
  • on-demand content
  • sentimental value
  • tactile experience
  • digital divide
  • misinformation
  • editorial standards
  • historical record
  • screen time
  • health impacts
  • media consumption
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