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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the acedemic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays the wide range of
information
 is share to society for a different purposes. Part of people thnk that everyhtnig should be transferent see espicially for scientific, bussined ana acdemic fields, while another consider that some
information
 in not meant to be shared. In
this
 essay i will argue that while scientific studes academic field and bussines arena cant developed if all
information
 is not opened to them , some reports need to be preserved. To start, with without clarity of situation and past events in the
world
, none of aformetionbed aspect can work effectively. Scince largeley depends on avialable dates and previous discoveries. If
such
information
 were not share to them , the global development would become standstill.
For example
: interntet is most signifacmt evolution civilization ever face to, and if the past infomrations of dicoveries were not open to its deveelopers, we still would live in pre-internet era.
Moreover
, if the ideas of bussinesses kept to secret
world
 would face the economical crises . thats the reason, still todat USAD programm from america, gather the bussinmen to help them invest new methods of agriculture and othe various things . On the ther hand, there is the
information
 which can penetrate the
world
 securty and its conceal is in favour of people themself.
For example
: if the formula of nucelar weapon were avaialable to every county it will have catastrophic result on civilization. For the sake of mainting glopal peace importance matter like
this
 should not be spred to mass. In conlusion, while
world
 developed due the past events and free informatoon for all is democrcy, some infomration need to be kept secret.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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