These days many kids spend a lot of their time playing computer games instead of doing sports. What is the cause of this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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the
recent world, the number of young children devoting Correct article usage
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their
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their time
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games
has been increasing rapidly. As a result
, they do not spend time
on outdoor sports as much
as they used toCorrect quantifier usage
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do
. I would like to raise some key causes of Unnecessary verb
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this
phenomenon and finally
to state my opinion that this
behaviour is an unwelcome one overall.
To start with, I believe there are a few key reasons accelerating
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for accelerating
this
young segment's unbalanced time
allocation. The most prominent one is the recent societal environment which does not allow kids to play freely outside anymore. For example
, the COVID-19 pandemic locked down towns and all citizens required
to spend Add a missing verb
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of their Add an article
the majority
a majority
times
indoors. Fix the agreement mistake
time
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pollution is another example, Correct article usage
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of
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the
European countries, Correct article usage
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all
forced kids to stay home and play by themselves. The other important element is the significant Correct determiner usage
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technical
advancement of online Replace the word
technological
games
. For instance
, the quality of games
became so high, they give us wonderful Correct your spelling
experiences
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in the cyber world. There is no doubt that an increasing number of people are attracted to Correct your spelling
experiences
the
online Correct article usage
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games
.
On the contrary
, this
rapid spread of internet games
has critical negative aspects especially
for the growth of young students. Add the comma(s)
,especially
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, they spend too much time
on the
device and Change the word
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have
not enough Add a missing verb
do have
time
playing outdoors with their friends. Undoubtedly, this
is bad for their healthy physical growth. In addition
, the lack of physical communications
with their peers may bring Fix the agreement mistake
communication
defect
to their communication skill development. Fix the agreement mistake
defects
Furthermore
, their relationship building
capability will decrease in a long run.
In conclusion, I believe there are a few key elements pushing kids to play online rather than Add a hyphen
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doing
sports. Namely, the current environments in society and the Wrong verb form
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cutting edge
advancement of computer Add a hyphen
cutting-edge
games
. This
, in my opinion, has huge demerits to the development of young
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segment
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segments
such
as negative impacts it causes for their physical growth and relationship and communication skill enhancements.Submitted by michima2011 on
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