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The most important consideration when choosing any career orjob is having a high income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, individuals are very ambitious about their future and everyone wants to get the best, especially for their role in the job industry. I do not agree with the statement because the most important factors are the
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 and passion when it comes to building a career. In
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 we really like the
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 the place, clients and
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 colleagues. Because spending time in a place that we do not like surrounded by individuals that we do not estimate, is very dangerous for our mental health, and in some
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 it can lead to depression.
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, many companies like Starbucks, are investing a lot of energy to create an amazing
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 in their shops, because their goal is to be attractive not only for customers but
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 for their employees.
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, another fundamental role is played by the passion that we have for that specific craft. If someone earns a good salary by doing something that he doesn't really like, he will not be happy and satisfied. Being passionate about your own job is better than having a high income because, thanks to love towards the
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, you will be everyday day happy and motivated to do your best.
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, there is a famous quote from the past that says: "If you love your
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, you will not
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 one day in your entire life". To conclude, even though earning a good income is important in a job, I strongly believe that the two most important factors are the passion that individuals put towards it and working in a good
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 with customers, location and peers.
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