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Some people believe that one of the best ways to solve environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As the world is on the cutting edge of globalisation, environmental issues are increasing day by day. So the
pollution
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 the ecosystem is varied in numerous.
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, some of the population withhold that increasing the prices of fuel for automated cars and other
vehicles
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 will solve environmental problems, but according to my point of view, I completely agree with the above statement. The following essay will outline my points with examples. Air
pollution
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 is
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 significant problem around the globe because many countries are suffering from the consequences of the issue. While it is evident that increasing the fuel prices will reduce
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,
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 because few
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 will be on the road and there will be less
pollution
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. To exemplify, Singapore has increased the tax rates of new
vehicles
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 so that there will be fewer buyers and the air
pollution
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 throughout the country will slightly reduce.
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, there are other methods to solve
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 problem as well. One of the methods is to increase the usage of public
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, make people aware of air
pollution
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 and its harmful effects on humans and reduce the fair prices of public
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vehicles
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, so that people will use more of them,
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 as there are a limited amount of public
vehicles
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 like trams, trains and buses if the government increase the
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 method the
pollution
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 of biodiversity will be reduced in the upcoming years. As an example, London has a huge metro train system, which is quite affordable and people prefer to use public
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 of personal
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. To sum up, environmental
pollution
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 can be reduced by increasing the price of gasoline,
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 there are other methods
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 as imposing taxes to brand new
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 and using public
vehicles
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 that will combat the issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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