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Housing is essential for people . Some argu that government should offer free housing for people who can not afford it.do you agree or disagree with this statement

#people #argu #government #offer
Accommodation is one of the most important
thing
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 one must have.
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Therefore
Thereore
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Therefore
, many
people
 raise their voices so that
government
 provide housing facilities to the homeless. Personally, I completely agree with that and in the subsequent paragraphs,
i
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 will be reasoning my stands.
To begin
 with, habitat is prioritized after food as
ones'
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 basic right and it is
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the governments'
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governments'
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 responsibility to ensure dwellings for all its citizens. Despite the responsibility of
government
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the government
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,
people
 with minimum earnings ensure residency
themselves
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for their families .
However
, many
people
 remain homeless due to poor financial
condition
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conditions
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.
For example
, many
rickshawpullers
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rickshaw-pullers
rickshaw pullers
 in the city area stay at
roadside
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 for the night as they can not afford living space in any residential area with their limited income.
Therefore
,
government
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 should facilitate
such
low income
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low-income
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people
 with
low budget
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 housing where they can stay at night
costfree
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cost-free
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 or
spending
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small
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amount
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. Another point worth mentioning is that there are some migrants who
faces
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 difficulties in availing accommodation mostly due to the socio-cultural differences with the dwellers of the new place they moved
.
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For instance
, Rohingyas who escaped from
Miyanmar
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Myanmar
 to Bangladesh following
vilations
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violations
 by
Burmese
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the Burmese
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 faced great miseries living in Chittagong areas as local
people
 did not accept their arrival warmly.
Consequently
,
huge
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 number of
people
 stayed under
sky
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 for several days which is quite
unhumane
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inhumane
.
Hence
, only
government
 can help those helpless
people
 to live
underprotection
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under protection
through
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by
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 constructing housing facilities so that they can have some times to restart
lives
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their lives
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. In conclusion, it can be reiterated
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that
the
thet
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that
 authorities should take the
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 to provide residential safety to the
people
 in need since fulfilling
basic
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 human rights of each
citizens
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citizen
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 is the holy liability of the
government
 of every
nations
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nation
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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