People are annoyed or entertained by advertising, but they are not affected by advertisements when making shopping decisions. To what extent you agree or disagree?

An advert can be intrusive or amusing,
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some contend that it does not have an impact on customers at the time of shopping. In
this
essay. I will explain why I agree with
this
opinion. It is believed that
advertisement
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advertisements
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have
subliminal
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a subliminal
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effect
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on people. These
commercials
have
untraceable
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impact on the subconscious of our brain in a way it influences us to make a purchase based on whether the product’s advert
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entertaining or annoying to us. As a case in point, Apple Inc. released a commercial for their
first
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personal computer in
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.
this
advertisement
, which is to
this
day known as the best commercial teaser of all time, helped them gain a huge profit which led the tech
company
to become one of the most successful corporations in the world.
Conversely
, there was an advert on television promoting a brand of soda
company
whose ads
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considered utterly annoying. The commercial was removed from the broadcasting program once the
company
realized that it has
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undermined
the sales rates. Watching adverts have
effect
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on your subconscious impacting your
decision making
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based on the feeling it generates. I,
however
, feel that
commercials
do not influence our buying decision. The process of choosing a commodity over others has become extremely confusing because of
huge
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amount of ad exposure we are enduring. Nowadays, we are constantly bombarded with various forms of advertising which
promotes
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almost any available
brands
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brand
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.
Consequently
, it makes selecting a brand over others frustrating.
For instance
, in supermarkets, choosing a brand of shampoo is becoming more difficult since all of the products are highly promoted.
As a result
, people
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to either make
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purchase
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purchases
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based on their instinct or
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the
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account of prior experience.
Furthermore
, there is
a common knowledge
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between
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consumers
consummers
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consumers
suggesting that
commercials
are exaggerated and should not be trusted.
This
is often the case in TV
commercials
as advertising agencies attempt to demonstrate a perfect image of products to entice the viewers and seemingly always surpass
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reality.
This
has shattered the trusting bubble of the impressionable viewers to the extent that the
advertisement
has lost its previous eminence resulting in being ignored by individuals. A newly established soda
company
,
for example
, claimed in their ad campaign that their scientists have discovered a formula for a drink in which you can experience a better taste in respect to
usuall
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usually
usual
giants’ products
such
as
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and Pepsi using fewer
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of sugar.
This
claim has later been nullified by the
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competitors
compatitors
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competitors
but not after the
company
gained a substantial amount of profit from the ad. These types of
commercials
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directed people to be
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dubious
about
advertisement
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advertisements
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. In conclusion, Regardless of how some might feel, I am convinced that the impact of
commercials
on viewers whether it is pleasant or disturbing would not influence shopping
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.
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