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Many government think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other typers of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A section of the public believe that
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economic
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 play the most vital role in a
country
, while another school of thought peddle that, there are other
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 of
progress
 which are equally beneficial to a
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, I will look at both sides of the argument and give my own opinion. On one hand,there are a group of people who are of the view that
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economic development is regarded as the most beneficial achievement for a
country
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 a nation
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 well when its economy thrives. For
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,
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 Kingdom is considered
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one of the most successful
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 with
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 economy.
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 majority of foreigners invest their money in different companies.
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no doubt that economic
progress
 is actually essential.
On the other hand
, people
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 that,other
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 of
progress
such
 as sports are
also
 important. They have
this
 view because these
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 not only generate income for the state but
also
 serve as sources of entertainment.
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 vast majority of people show their love when watching football especially when their team or
country
 is playing with other opponents.
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In fact
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In fact
 it even unites broken homes. Research
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 revealed that
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other
the
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other
 types of
progress
 contribute to
booming
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 development of a
country
. In
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 I believe both sides of the argument have their
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 merits,
however
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 on balance,I tend to agree that other
progress
such
 as sports are
also
 beneficial because it doesn't only generate income for the state but
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source of entertainment.
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