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Teaching art in schools also improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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Schools
 are very important for the development of
society
. Physics, maths, geography and history are subjects thought in
schools
 from all over the world and sometimes subjects like
arts
 are left aside as not so important. Yet
arts
 should be obligatory in
schools
 and I will explain why I agree in the
next
 paragraphs.
First
, the development of
society
 is directly connected to the performance of the
students
, that said, if the
students
 are multi-skilled,
society
 will be highly developed with multiple skills.
For example
, one student in the future can become an entrepreneur from a successful company and create various employments, in that way, money is generated for
society
 and brought back to
schools
.
Second
, a multi-skilled student, who developed multiple skills in school in art classes, can
also
 become an artist, a director or even a writer.
For instance
, a student who performs
arts
 can be the
next
 billionaire a lot faster than someone that takes the secure path of working 9-5. 
In other words
, studying
arts
 and being a highly successful artist, can lead you to an unexpected path of amazing money and happiness, artists get to have a different life, with amazing experiences. In conclusion, it is very important to teach
students
 to be multi-skilled, as knowledge is and always will be a great skill to have. That said, I agree teaching
arts
 in
schools
 should be obligatory ,
although
 it is not more important than physics, maths, history or geography. All the subjects are equally important for the development of the
students
.
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