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Many would argue that scientific research requires a degree of oversight from the relevant governmental authorities. In my opinion, properly handled, this is a sensible and necessary policy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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It has never been widely agreed upon
should
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 someone oversee scientific
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 or not. It was
controversial
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a controversial
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 question and now it remains the same.
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outline
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main
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 benefits and drawbacks of constant observation of scientific
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. A lot of
scientist
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face
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 with
deficit
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a deficit
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 of money for scientific works.
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, it would be better
cooperate
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 with
government
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 officials. Authorities could assign enough budgets to scientific works in different fields.
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, it should be mentioned that universities are not allowed to allocate some budgets for a specific field according to their personal opinion and it could restrain
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the development
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 of different
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.
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, the more money will be allocated the more progress will be in various
area
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 of science. Another
one
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great aspect of
supervising
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government
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the government
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 is setting strong rules related to
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 experiments that conducting with people
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in.
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 In fact, authorities legislate rules that patients have the right to be aware of experiments
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 as testing a new vaccine or medication. In the nutshell,
scientists
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 can not test patience without their permission.
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,the number of illegal dangerous
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 is
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 reduced Considering
downsides
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 ,the most important issue is
restriction
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a restriction
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 of
freedom
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the freedom
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 of
scientists
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.
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, in some religious countries, authorities do not allow
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 to carry out
some
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research
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 in genetic engineering because of controversial and ethical beliefs. Despite the fact that development in
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 field may result in new treatments for some diseases. To summarise, it is better for
scientists
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 to conduct
research
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 under
government
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 supervision, because it gives
opportunity
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 to finance projects, establishes certain rules at the legislative level and
decrease
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 illegality.
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,
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government
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the government
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 has a positive influence on
development
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the development
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on
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of
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 science. After
thorough
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 analysis
on
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 subject, it is predicted significant improvement in science with support
by
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