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Writing Samples
Band 7

There have been some problems with public transport in your area recently. Write a letter to the manager of the transport company. In your letter -describe the problems -explain how these problems are affecting the public -suggest some changes that could be made.

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Dear Sir , I am writing
this
 letter to bring your attention towards the difficulty with the bus service in our locality .I am a resident of Mayfield Village. I want to inform you about the bad experience people are facing The bus drivers are never punctual they are always late .
Moreover
, the condition of the buses is really worse . People have been struggling with these issues . Most of the time the passengers are late for their work just because of the bus service .
Additionally
, the bad condition of public transport is making society inconvenient. I really appreciate your patience . If possible Please ask the higher authority to improve the situation of the buses and
also
 make sure all the drivers are on time. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours sincerely, Raman Sandhu
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logical structure
To achieve a higher score, enhance the logical structure by ensuring a clear connection between ideas, perhaps using linking words or phrases.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea. For clarity, separate the discussion of problems, effects, and solutions more distinctly.
greeting and closing
The letter has a proper greeting and closing, which enhances its formality and effectiveness.
complete response
The response addresses the task requirements by describing the problems, their effects, and suggesting a solution.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is suitable for a formal letter to a manager, showing respect and seriousness.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plaguing
  • delays
  • frustration
  • inconvenience
  • productivity
  • rely on
  • daily commute
  • overall
  • condition
  • deteriorated
  • overcrowded
  • seating arrangements
  • compromises
  • safety
  • comfort
  • impacts
  • hygienic
  • maintenance
  • unpleasant
  • alternative
  • modes of transportation
  • congestion
  • pollution
  • fuel consumption
  • proposed
  • infrastructure
  • upgrading
  • expanding
  • cater to
  • growing population
  • focus on
  • regular maintenance
  • breakdowns
  • hire
  • train
  • customer service
  • overcrowding
  • expectations
  • managing
  • minimizing
  • appropriate action
  • reliable
  • efficient
  • sustainable
  • benefits
  • entire community
  • Thank you for your attention to this matter.
  • Yours faithfully
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