In most countries disabled people are not catered for adequately, e.g. buildings are often inappropriately designed. Governments rely too heavily on charities and voluntary organizations to provide assistance and funding. What further measures could be taken to assist disabled people. Discuss.

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deserted due to the city that cannot
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population. So the government need charities and voluntary
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to provide donation and assistance. On one hand, the amount of population is increasing while
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of the world is
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down.
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of family and cannot respond to the number of family members raising.
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separating
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of levels in society is blocking opportunity of the individuals.
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cause to more people are abandoned and become homeless in most countries. A good illustration of
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of levels.
On the other hand
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or provide other
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to
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or people who need help To conclude, the world is facing
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the
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population that increasing
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. So the government and
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who can
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to provide assistance and money to individuals who
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abandoned
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adequately cater
  • inappropriately designed
  • stricter building regulations
  • accessible
  • ramps
  • elevators
  • tactile guidance paths
  • allocated
  • disability services
  • tax incentives
  • public awareness campaigns
  • rights and capabilities
  • reduce stigma
  • promote inclusivity
  • robust policies
  • equal access
  • government body
  • overseeing
  • accessibility standards
  • assistive technologies
  • subsidizing
  • communication devices
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